I found student essay number two to be more free of error than student essay one was. Even though it had less issues in it, it still was not perfect as it is very hard for anyone regardless of academic status to write without error. The three main problems that I found in this essay were spelling, usage, and formatting. Spelling was an issue for the writer of this paper in a few different instances. The errors were small, and I did not find any huge glaring issues, but nonetheless, they were still issues. For example, in paragraph two, the student was referring to “unique intonation” but spelled the phrase “unique intonasion”. There is also another instance of a spelling issue in the second complete paragraph on page three. The student spelled …show more content…
Something I have found is that when you read something back to yourself out loud, one is able to catch more error than you are when you read to yourself in your head. For the spelling issues, I would recommend that the student remember to use the spelling correction feature on Microsoft Word and that will help them significantly as the misspelled words will be underlined in read. Word is also able to catch some grammatical issues and those will be underlined in green. To fix the usage issues that exist within this essay, is may be effective if the student also remembers what tense that he or she is writing in and try to make it a point to stick to that tense. While the student is reading through their essay, they should also delete all the unneeded words from each sentences. While I was reading this essay, there were a few times that the student could have gotten their point across by using less words. An example of this can be found in opening sentence of the essay when the student states “what the essential pieces are in this puzzle are controversial”. The student could have got the main idea of the sentence simply by deleting the words “what the” and continuing the sentence from there. As far as formatting goes, I think that the student should research correct MLA formatting and become familiar with it. …show more content…
I definitely think that this second essay was much more effective and well written than the first essay. This essay for me almost brought the topic of language full circle for me and showed the importance of grammar in language. I noted that I did not think that there were many transitional issues in the essay because I believe that this essay could flow many different ways. The way that the author had it set up at the start works and I am able to understand it, but even when I try and move paragraphs around, I am still able to understand and retrieve the meaning of the essay. I think one of the reasons why it is hard to decide positively whether or not there are any transitional issues is because the essay had no thesis or guideline for the reader to follow. Despite not having a thesis, I still was able to understand this essay and comprehend it. I think perhaps something that could make this essay even more effective is a little more background information on the topic. I was able to conclude that the topic is the structure or oral or verbal language, and what constitutes it. I was able to understand this essay because I read the last essay from the student about spoken language in other languages, so I felt that I was already aware of some of the information. This essay is able to be understood without reading the previous essay, but I still think
In “Ethos and Error: How Business People React to Errors”, Larry Beason (2016) demonstrates how academic mistakes affect both students and teachers, especially business people. Beason’s main argument is that errors influence seriously on nonacademic audiences, not only in common reading but also in normal life. To prove his point of view, Beason does his experiment on fourteen business people reading articles about business and everyday handwriting and see how they react. Beason divides his examination into two phases: a survey with twenty mistakes and an interview with everyone. In the questionnaire, the author introduces five common academic errors and each of them consists four examples.
There is an importance of comparing similar essays, because although at a first glance they might read and feel the same, but upon closer inspection and reading, there are a multitude of differences between
It seems like the classmate did a good job in grammar, spelling and proof reading. I didn’t see any grammatical errors throughout the essay. Overall, this is a well written essay and I didn’t see any problems. 7.
Critiquing of “College is a Safe Bet” The essay “College is a Safe Bet” by Julie Margetta Morgan had a couple of problems in which the Author does not cite anything and her message is unclear. One must question how true something is if they do not cite any thing and it the information that they do give it incorrect according to the United States Department of Labor. Since the information it wrong then there is no reason to believe the rest of the essay.
The first thing I did when I went to go read this essay was look up in the index what it focused on, when I saw that it was Language and Communication I thought to myself “oh my gosh this is going to be so boring”, but once I read it I actually thought it was extremely comical. When I think about punctuation I immediately freeze, but the way Lewis told his story about how to use punctuation was brilliant. In this essay, Lewis talked about how to use parenthesis, commas, semicolons, colons, exclamation points, quotation marks, and the dash; However, my favorite section was when he was talking about comma usage.
Not all people whose English as a second language speak it in the same way. This argument made by Amy Tan in the story “Mother Tongue”. In the essay, she successfully uses all three of rhetorical styles such as logos, ethos, and pathos. Tan also balances each part of the rhetorical triangle very effective and thoughtful essay. First of all, the author uses logos and reasoning in her essay.
My two essays I chose to compare and contrast are the Literary Analysis of When I Was Puerto Rican and Analyzing Foreshadowing in Desiree ’s Baby essays both done by analyzing others work which are similar in the way that I broke down the two essays apart and examined them to their truest meaning. In When I Was Puerto Rican I noticed that my work reflected how unadvanced of a writer I was during the beginning of the year and displayed how I clearly lacked greatly in depth and clarification of what I was trying to state. At times during the essay I would stray away from the main topic and lose concentration of my focal point or thesis statement.
In this essay I will review how I have improved as a writer, my greatest challenges, and how has my writing changed from how it was at the start of class to now. Reflection is a powerful thing, I can still remember how it felt being asked to write an essay on my first day of class. I was so scared, would I be able to use correct punctuation and how bad will it affect my grade if I am not? I was so excited when the professor said it was just to see that we can write conformed sentences not to critique our grammar and punctuation.
In Essay One, my thoughts are more organized and less sloppy. My writing ability is nowhere near where I would like it to be, but it is a step closer. In the First-Week Essay, I had incomplete thoughts and I did not know how to properly set up an essay. For example, I did not write a conclusion because I did not think of it as a necessary component.
An essay must follow the basic structure introduction, body, and conclusion. By having the correct structure of an essay, the reader is able to read the essay more clearly. Applebaum’s essay follows the basic structure. Applebaum has an introduction that starts with an attention getter and ends with a thesis. After stating the thesis, he begins with the first body paragraph that begins with “Representative Hansen Clark” here the reader knows that what should be next is about student loans.
A writing error is a point in a piece of writing where the author unknowingly creates a moment of confusion for the reader in such a way that it detracts from the piece’s meaning. A writing mistake sounds like something that is more of an “oopsie” that the writer created something that wasn’t exactly what they were trying to articulate, but they are able to realize it was a mistake when they evaluate it. I guess what drives the two apart is the fact that errors, even upon further reading, don’t jump out to the writer as being inaccurate. Whether they be mistakes or errors, it’s important for a tutor to understand the root of these inaccuracies in ESL papers. Minett discusses “contrastive rhetoric” and how writing faux pas may actually be
Overall, “More Testing, More Learning” was a very good essay. Patrick excelled in using many different writing strategies, using statistics and stories pertaining to his main idea. Not only did he use credibility to better his main point, he also included much background information on his topic. Although he gave background on what other students did or felt, he struggled with telling the audience any of his personal struggles with taking midterms. Also a slight downfall of the paper, O’Malley did not do a very good job at using appropriate language.
One of the things that the peer feedback discussed was the amount of well written support was present for each of my examples. However, some said they would have liked to see more examples for each point. Because my outline was less of an sentence by sentence layout of what I wanted to write, and just covered the points I wanted to hit my word choice was a bit difficult. Along with misspelled words, some words seemed to have no presuppose in the essay, and made no sense in the sentence. These unneeded words made the essay sound more vacant and underdeveloped.
So, by the end of the essay, I was able to understand the author in some way. When reading future essays for this course, I imagine I will do the same. Continue to read the essay, re-read when necessary, and maybe even take breaks and go back to the reading with fresh
In my essay analyzing “All Summer in a Day” I did not receive the grade I had expected for the following reasons. First of all, I lacked awareness in my grammar while writing. This led to my ideas being somewhat confusing to read such as my last paragraph which contained a very unnecessarily long run-on that did not serve a necessary purpose. On top of that, my ideas seemed very jumbled and sporadic. This is due to me not reading it aloud to myself in order to take out unnecessary details which is especially evident in, again, the final paragraph.